Hi and welcome to this week's eight sentences! This week I am continuing with my spookily erotic story 'Patrick's Pendant' from Yellow Silk Dreams anthology 'Enchanted'. I have carried straight on from last week.
My Eight:
Suddenly her
lacy skater dress and bare legs seemed impractical.
Would he even notice that she’d left?
How would she get home?
She was angry
now, too angry to cry any more, cold and angry and just a tiny bit inebriated.
“Katie?” it was
Miranda’s voice, “Are you out here?”
Katie stared
blankly towards the little path. She could see the vague silhouette of her best
friend emerging slowly into the clearing hugging her arms around herself in a
vain attempt to keep warm.
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Aw, I couldn't leave her out there alone with those empty, swaying swings!
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I hope he's got a blanket to warm her up. Great 8
ReplyDeleteNice writing. It flows well. Good detail.
ReplyDeleteNice description. I found myself shivering in the cold at the mention of the lacy skater dress. But I suspect that things will warm up nicely for her soon. Good job!
ReplyDeleteVery detailed description. I could feel the chill in the air. Well done!
ReplyDeletegreat 8. Katie's awareness of the position she's in hits home. loved how you shared her inner turmoil
ReplyDeleteNice writing in eight. I'm with everyone, cold chills and all picturing myself as a young woman..
ReplyDeleteNice use of the 8's not only for the setting but the chars state of mind. Well done, Gemma!
ReplyDeleteI'm shivering just reading it. Well described, puts the reader right there with here. Nice eight!
ReplyDeleteYou described that scene perfectly with her scant outfit, her friend hugging herself. Burr...I hat the cold. I felt that.
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I feel so sorry for Katie. But I'm so glad that Miranda is going to keep her company. I remember nights like that - angry at someone and realizing only after you've stormed out how cold it is, the chill nipping at your legs. You captured that very well. Great eight!
ReplyDeleteExcellent eight. It tugged at my heartstrings right off, drawing me in. I agree, most every woman has been there and knows that feeling.
ReplyDeleteNice description and subtlety.
ReplyDeleteI'm shivering. :) Love how you've mixed the setting and her state of mind. Well done, Gemma.
ReplyDeleteI sure felt the cold and the misery - very powerful excerpt. I'm glad Miranda is arriving on the scene!
ReplyDeleteI'm feeling for Katie. An emotional scene. I'm glad you didn't leave her all alone. :)
ReplyDeleteNot the person she wanted to notice her leaving--whoever 'he' is. But perhaps her friend will do. Neither of them are practically dressed--time to go back inside, or go home!
ReplyDeleteOh dear...what an eerie scene. I can't wait for more.
ReplyDeleteOoh, I want to hear what's next! Lovely breezy 8!
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