Hi everyone, welcome to another 8 sentences. This week as the dark nights are approaching, I thought I would share a spooky story from 'Enchanted' a Yellow Silk Dreams anthology. My story is called 'Patrick's Pendant' and my 8 are the opening lines:
My Eight:
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Katie ran from
the noise of the party across the empty road and towards a spinney behind a set
of garages. She blinked away the many tears that threatened to thwart her view
of the little path that led to three old swings and a rusty seesaw.
Nervously she
glanced around in the darkness, she had been sure that someone would have been
concerned enough to follow her.
Slumping down on
the damp plastic seat on one of the swings she rocked back and forth, keeping both
feet on the ground.
Her friends had
been right, it was such a cliché but even her mother had told her so.
As her breathing
calmed Katie pulled her cardigan closer around her. The swings on either side
were swaying in the cool night breeze and the trees were rustling.
It was late, very late, possibly 2am and the
temperature had dropped considerably.
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That could be quite spooky -- depending on what came next. Gr8 snippet.
ReplyDeleteLovely imagery making a very ominous eight!
ReplyDeleteScary eight. I pictured my daughter as if she were the girl in your eight. What a well written scene.
ReplyDeleteNice imagery. I'm wondering what got her so upset.
ReplyDeleteYou create a really vivid sense of atmosphere here; it really made me want to read more.
ReplyDeleteNervous and crying, running around at 2am. What has gotten her so upset? She needs a handsome hero to come to her rescue. Please tell us more...
ReplyDeleteFantastic imagery. And I do want to know what has her so upset.
ReplyDeleteI wish I knew what had upset her so! Poor girl. Great 8.
ReplyDeleteGreat job creating a spooky setting! Can't wait to read what happens next.
ReplyDeleteI expected a dark someone (something?) to pop out behind her at any moment. Great job setting the mood!
ReplyDeleteI love this beginning it's so packed with emotion! great! I hope you'll post more of this!
ReplyDeleteGreat way to capture my interest from the beginning! Well done, Gemma.
ReplyDeleteOh poor thing. Makes me suspect a boy broke her heart. Also makes me wonder why no one did follow her out of concern...what's gonna happen next?!?
ReplyDeletePoor Katie. Fabulous opening, Gemma. You pulled me right in and let me wanting more.
ReplyDeleteVivid description, makes me all kinds of curious why she's out there, what happened...excellent excerpt! Can't wait to read more of the story.
ReplyDeletewow. makes me want to warn her to be careful. dark night, abandoned playground equal trouble coming. nice use of the 8
ReplyDeleteHmm, either her friends didn't notice her leaving, or they're not really her friends. Hope nobody bad finds her while she's waiting to calm down.
ReplyDeleteYou have me really intrigued about what made her flee the party--nice snippet!
A very creepy atmosphere... I'm waiting for something magic or horrible (or both!) to happen! Awesome excerpt :)
ReplyDeleteGreat hook. I want to know what happened to send her out there!
ReplyDeleteOh that is so sad. I feel bad for her. Good writing for you making me feel that. Now I'm wondering if the right person or wrong person will come?
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Actually, nobody is ever concerned enough to follow. It seems like a dangerous place to be in the middle of the night.
ReplyDeleteSpooky. Great hook to end it with though. I love the set up. Nice snippet.
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