Sunday 15 September 2013

Weekend Writing Warriors #34


Hi and welcome to this week's eight sentences. I am sharing 8 more from 'Dancing for the Boys'. Last week we left our heroine surveying the room she was about to perform in. Here I jump forward a few paragraphs, enjoy!:

My Eight

I teased the basque down past my toned stomach and leaned forward turning slowly around as l wiggled it to the floor before stepping out of it, one heeled shoe at a time. I stretched out my long legs in exaggerated high kicks first one way then the other stroking my hand up each, stopping short of my crotch. Turning my body away to grin at the DJ, l shimmied my butt causing a fresh ripple of delighted shouts from the men.
Turning back to face them l ran my hands over my breasts, the nipples of which were very excited and now pointed shamelessly towards the drooling faces. I wanted to make sure they all wanted me as I surrendered myself to Joe’s husky tones. The excitement in the room was tangible reflecting back at me from hungry eyes and heated faces. Their encouragement drove me on, this was my show, it was me they wanted.
By the time the song rolled to an end, I was stood on the stage in just my heels and thong trying hard to ignore the complaints from the pussy hungry men.

************

Rather her than me! Thank you for stopping by please do take the time to comment, I really appreciate what you have to say. If you click on the link below you will be able to visit the other authors taking part today:


Check Out Dancing for the Boys by clicking the Links:

All Romance Fiction 
Smashwords



23 comments:

  1. You describe the scene well. Good job.

    ReplyDelete
  2. Good descriptions, Gemma. You also add witty adjectives in the right places. Interesting 8!

    ReplyDelete
  3. Did you research this scene before writing, Gemma? WOW! You captured the wildness of her, men, the whole atmosphere. Great eight.

    ReplyDelete
    Replies
    1. Thank you Charmaine! No I didn't research I just imagined what it would be like...(blush!)

      Delete
  4. Whoa. I love how much she seems to be enjoying herself:)

    ReplyDelete
  5. Love the way she feeds off the energy in the room. Great work!

    ReplyDelete
  6. Nice details, makes it easy to get caught up in the moment!

    ReplyDelete
  7. Beautiful description made this scene easy to visualize - great job (only niggle is with the last sentence - think it would read better w/o the was.

    Again, great job

    ReplyDelete
  8. Great description to put the reader right inside the scene. Well done!

    ReplyDelete
  9. hot snippet! way to get me into the story right away haha.

    ReplyDelete
  10. Sensual and titillating, well done, Gemma.

    ReplyDelete
  11. Wow, she's bold and obviously really enjoying herself and the moment. Love this heroine you've created! Excellent excerpt!

    ReplyDelete
  12. She's so brave. I'd have been standing in a little puddle...it'd scare me so much! I could totally see this happening, nice job of painting the scene!

    ReplyDelete
  13. Oooh, very nicely described scene :-)

    ReplyDelete
  14. Wowza. First's she's got guts. Second, well detailed, easy visual. I'm sure the boys are enjoying this show! Great snippet.

    ReplyDelete
  15. What a turn on even through a computer from cyberspace. Awesome 8.

    ReplyDelete
  16. Sexuality is power and clearly she knows how to wield hers most effectively.

    ReplyDelete
  17. Wow, you can paint a word picture. Well done.

    ReplyDelete
  18. Wow, you can paint a word picture. Well done.

    ReplyDelete
  19. like everyone else my first thought was WOW. the image you painted was vivid and we also got a sense of her inner feelings as well as the men watching. awesome

    ReplyDelete
  20. Excellent description, Gemma. I like this in particular "...now pointed shamelessly..." Wow, those few words speak volumes about the transformation she's undergone while dancing. Nice job :-)

    ReplyDelete
  21. You have a very effective way to describe the scene.

    ReplyDelete
  22. I have to agree with the others--the descriptions here are fantastic. Awesome scene, Gemma!

    ReplyDelete