Hi and welcome to this week's eight sentences. I am sharing 8 more from 'Dancing for the Boys'. Last week we left our heroine surveying the room she was about to perform in. Here I jump forward a few paragraphs, enjoy!:
My Eight
I teased the basque down past my toned stomach and leaned forward
turning slowly around as l wiggled it to the floor before stepping out of it,
one heeled shoe at a time. I stretched out my long legs in exaggerated high
kicks first one way then the other stroking my hand up each, stopping short of
my crotch. Turning my body away to grin at the DJ, l shimmied my butt causing a
fresh ripple of delighted shouts from the men.
Turning back to face them l ran my hands over my breasts, the
nipples of which were very excited and now pointed shamelessly towards the
drooling faces. I wanted to make sure they all wanted me as I surrendered
myself to Joe’s husky tones. The excitement in the room was tangible reflecting
back at me from hungry eyes and heated faces. Their encouragement drove me on,
this was my show, it was me they wanted.
By the time the song rolled to an end, I was stood
on the stage in just my heels and thong trying hard to ignore the complaints
from the pussy hungry men.
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You describe the scene well. Good job.
ReplyDeleteGood descriptions, Gemma. You also add witty adjectives in the right places. Interesting 8!
ReplyDeleteDid you research this scene before writing, Gemma? WOW! You captured the wildness of her, men, the whole atmosphere. Great eight.
ReplyDeleteThank you Charmaine! No I didn't research I just imagined what it would be like...(blush!)
DeleteWhoa. I love how much she seems to be enjoying herself:)
ReplyDeleteLove the way she feeds off the energy in the room. Great work!
ReplyDeleteNice details, makes it easy to get caught up in the moment!
ReplyDeleteBeautiful description made this scene easy to visualize - great job (only niggle is with the last sentence - think it would read better w/o the was.
ReplyDeleteAgain, great job
Great description to put the reader right inside the scene. Well done!
ReplyDeletehot snippet! way to get me into the story right away haha.
ReplyDeleteSensual and titillating, well done, Gemma.
ReplyDeleteWow, she's bold and obviously really enjoying herself and the moment. Love this heroine you've created! Excellent excerpt!
ReplyDeleteShe's so brave. I'd have been standing in a little puddle...it'd scare me so much! I could totally see this happening, nice job of painting the scene!
ReplyDeleteOooh, very nicely described scene :-)
ReplyDeleteWowza. First's she's got guts. Second, well detailed, easy visual. I'm sure the boys are enjoying this show! Great snippet.
ReplyDeleteWhat a turn on even through a computer from cyberspace. Awesome 8.
ReplyDeleteSexuality is power and clearly she knows how to wield hers most effectively.
ReplyDeleteWow, you can paint a word picture. Well done.
ReplyDeleteWow, you can paint a word picture. Well done.
ReplyDeletelike everyone else my first thought was WOW. the image you painted was vivid and we also got a sense of her inner feelings as well as the men watching. awesome
ReplyDeleteExcellent description, Gemma. I like this in particular "...now pointed shamelessly..." Wow, those few words speak volumes about the transformation she's undergone while dancing. Nice job :-)
ReplyDeleteYou have a very effective way to describe the scene.
ReplyDeleteI have to agree with the others--the descriptions here are fantastic. Awesome scene, Gemma!
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