tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-4365081983572417092.post5368935909712359507..comments2023-10-21T10:57:21.619+01:00Comments on Gemma Parkes: Living and Loving with A Passion!: Weekend Writing Warriors #40gemma parkeshttp://www.blogger.com/profile/06275261646534324484noreply@blogger.comBlogger23125tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-4365081983572417092.post-1404345084311880272013-10-29T03:17:52.870+00:002013-10-29T03:17:52.870+00:00Ugh. Seems like none of the comments I did from my...Ugh. Seems like none of the comments I did from my ipad went through yesterday. <br /><br />Anyway, I basically said what everyone else did,what did they hear! Great job building suspense in so few sentences.<br /><br />HistorySleuthhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/05502098938801373264noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-4365081983572417092.post-58922542152172372882013-10-28T17:04:12.256+00:002013-10-28T17:04:12.256+00:00Ah well Caitlin, that's the thing with only ei...Ah well Caitlin, that's the thing with only eight sentences! The next sentences do say what exactly they heard but sticking to 8 left it hanging! Thanks for commenting.gemma parkeshttps://www.blogger.com/profile/06275261646534324484noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-4365081983572417092.post-39548495237298282532013-10-28T12:48:28.102+00:002013-10-28T12:48:28.102+00:00Ahhhh! Tease! What did they hear??? Very captivati...Ahhhh! Tease! What did they hear??? Very captivating 8! Anonymoushttps://www.blogger.com/profile/08920349957061612653noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-4365081983572417092.post-27497786281420755952013-10-28T03:24:29.754+00:002013-10-28T03:24:29.754+00:00Arrgh!! WHAT did they hear?? lol! Excellent snippe...Arrgh!! WHAT did they hear?? lol! Excellent snippet for Halloween week! Nicely done :-)Teresa Cypherhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/08940430996766842518noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-4365081983572417092.post-57962487664729722013-10-28T00:34:57.159+00:002013-10-28T00:34:57.159+00:00Very spooky. What did they hear! Great 8. Very spooky. What did they hear! Great 8. Anonymousnoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-4365081983572417092.post-87873679421420408312013-10-28T00:26:27.883+00:002013-10-28T00:26:27.883+00:00Yikes. Spooky 8 this week .thanks for sharing.Yikes. Spooky 8 this week .thanks for sharing.Heather Boydhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/12522336655445579477noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-4365081983572417092.post-76076647980664870872013-10-28T00:14:53.586+00:002013-10-28T00:14:53.586+00:00Nice description--spooky setting. The word 'it...Nice description--spooky setting. The word 'it' from "They heard it..." Jumped out at me a little, as something vague among the specific. Maybe something still suspenseful, but more detailed would work better?<br /><br />Like 'the noise,' or even a sound description like a crackle or snap that would still leave us wondering what's happening. :)Anonymousnoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-4365081983572417092.post-38023803350514248542013-10-27T23:36:48.774+00:002013-10-27T23:36:48.774+00:00So spooky!! What did they hear? I can't wait ...So spooky!! What did they hear? I can't wait to see more.Sarah Casshttps://www.blogger.com/profile/03299866797067130767noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-4365081983572417092.post-70645620164790831042013-10-27T21:08:18.862+00:002013-10-27T21:08:18.862+00:00Thanks everyone! I am so glad that you're enjo...Thanks everyone! I am so glad that you're enjoying this spooky tale!gemma parkeshttps://www.blogger.com/profile/06275261646534324484noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-4365081983572417092.post-45205363333007248362013-10-27T20:34:49.684+00:002013-10-27T20:34:49.684+00:00ooh love this! I got goosebumps at the end. Can...ooh love this! I got goosebumps at the end. Can't wait to see what happens next week!Laurenhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/07986129906420811246noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-4365081983572417092.post-79024001711147933642013-10-27T19:50:00.423+00:002013-10-27T19:50:00.423+00:00Gak! What's up ahead?! Nice job creating an ed...Gak! What's up ahead?! Nice job creating an edgy mood. ::bites nails for the women::Jhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/11457235963917206588noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-4365081983572417092.post-61636875473681791852013-10-27T18:50:06.748+00:002013-10-27T18:50:06.748+00:00I can relate since can't see in the dark. Wond...I can relate since can't see in the dark. Wonder what they heard?suehttp://sassyspeaks.wordpress.comnoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-4365081983572417092.post-63346104730563751232013-10-27T18:21:24.407+00:002013-10-27T18:21:24.407+00:00Your eight put this reader on edge thinking of my ...Your eight put this reader on edge thinking of my own daughter ignoring warnings. Good writing and Boo, shame on you for scaring all of us!Charmaine Gordonhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/15236373312231763983noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-4365081983572417092.post-17134021385803195352013-10-27T18:14:35.747+00:002013-10-27T18:14:35.747+00:00Wonderfully descriptive passage. Curiosity has be...Wonderfully descriptive passage. Curiosity has been peaked about what they heard. Definitely spooky! Debbie D. https://www.blogger.com/profile/13153118405565035071noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-4365081983572417092.post-10793565997405065772013-10-27T18:11:13.569+00:002013-10-27T18:11:13.569+00:00Ooh, spooky. Her comment about not being able to s...Ooh, spooky. Her comment about not being able to see the road ahead was great...can't wait to read more. Excellent excerpt!Veronica Scotthttps://www.blogger.com/profile/04732940088047026021noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-4365081983572417092.post-91460868707897419082013-10-27T17:23:03.395+00:002013-10-27T17:23:03.395+00:00You showed so much in this excerpt. Vivid details ...You showed so much in this excerpt. Vivid details and descriptions. Very well done! :)Anonymoushttps://www.blogger.com/profile/13436620421781059000noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-4365081983572417092.post-23216268225823039572013-10-27T16:46:16.454+00:002013-10-27T16:46:16.454+00:00Not fair!!! What did they hear? LOL... Nice snippe...Not fair!!! What did they hear? LOL... Nice snippet.A.S. Fenichelhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/15188528705441184803noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-4365081983572417092.post-47094237485573567282013-10-27T16:30:33.825+00:002013-10-27T16:30:33.825+00:00They heard what?!? Gemma, not nice : ) Nice amou...They heard what?!? Gemma, not nice : ) Nice amount of tension and buildup.Anonymoushttps://www.blogger.com/profile/05551671528722336812noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-4365081983572417092.post-22972765672470859292013-10-27T15:58:48.093+00:002013-10-27T15:58:48.093+00:00This is scary, what was the noise? This is scary, what was the noise? Lindahttps://www.blogger.com/profile/13346034896296813841noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-4365081983572417092.post-46882205491203560302013-10-27T15:15:02.171+00:002013-10-27T15:15:02.171+00:00Gemma!! I'm completely spooked. Well done.Gemma!! I'm completely spooked. Well done.S.J. Mayleehttps://www.blogger.com/profile/00071906614814860932noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-4365081983572417092.post-63972196887553106212013-10-27T15:01:50.977+00:002013-10-27T15:01:50.977+00:00Lots of great tension here and you set the atmosph...Lots of great tension here and you set the atmosphere just right. Great eight!Anonymoushttps://www.blogger.com/profile/05551959202889083501noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-4365081983572417092.post-47929137922414226922013-10-27T13:32:27.240+00:002013-10-27T13:32:27.240+00:00Fantastic visual of their walk through the park. W...Fantastic visual of their walk through the park. Who's following them? I'm intrigued. Great 8.Karen Michelle Nutthttps://www.blogger.com/profile/04083893569523248900noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-4365081983572417092.post-73190251231149529492013-10-27T13:28:43.046+00:002013-10-27T13:28:43.046+00:00great use of detail and setting the scene. nice 8great use of detail and setting the scene. nice 8Anonymoushttps://www.blogger.com/profile/13164269285285491186noreply@blogger.com